Summarising

ARataki Honey

Arataki Honey

“Yay! We are here”I said. I was at Aerotek Honey  with my dad and my  friend Sophie.

When ee got inside me and Sophie went straight to taste the honey. All of the honey was delicious.

After tasting all the honey, we went to find the the Queen bee and we found her after a while of searching.

After we found the queen bee Sophie showed me where a  little Bee Movie was and so me, Sophie and my dad watched it.

After we watched the bee movie we decide to go home and watch a DVD and relax for the rest of the afternoon.

BY DANICA COTTER  

Reflection

I need to work on

adding lots of descriptive

words.  

Lost in the Supermarket

Lost in the supermarket

I was at the supermarket with my mum.I was looking at at coco pops Cereal I turned around and my mum wasn't there. I was scared I walked down to the end of the aisle and acted like I was confident but I really wasn't.

I looked in the next aisle and my mum wasn't there I was more scared than I was before.

I looked in the next aisle and there she was looking at a product. I ran to her and hugged her tight.

My mum asked why I was hugging her tight so I told her what had happened.

Reflection - I need to work on adding more detail.