Sunday, 13 November 2016

How Hannah Found the Secret of Fire by Danica

How Hannah found the  secret of fire Retold by Danica
Long ago there  was a girl named Hannah.She lived in a small pa. Hannah had only one friend kiwi. Hannah was a very mischievious girl. One night Hannah wondered how fire was made so Hannah got same water and she put out all the fire in her pa. The next morning Hannah heard people yelling at her door”YOU SILLY GIRL YOU PUT OUT ALL THE FIRE NOW WE HAVE NO LIGHT. GO TO THE VOLCANO AND GET MORE FIRE FROM ANALISE!!!”chief Maui yelled. So Hannah started to walk towards the volcano but her friend kiwi wanted to came with her. So the two of them walked to the volcano.When Hannah arrived at the volcano there was a river "how will I get over this river I know I will jump over it”Hannah thought to herself so her and kiwi jumped over the river. When Hannah looked in side of the volcano she saw Analise sitting in front of a sparking fire. Hannah said “Excuse me can I have same fire? All the fire in our pa has gone out!” “Take good care of this fire” said Analise. When Hannah left the volcano she dropped the fire in the lake. Hannah went back in and said “Analise I dropped the fire in the lake! Can I have another?” “take even more care of this one” Analise said.Again Hannah went to the river and dropt the fire in the river.Hannah cept on doing this antil Analise was on her last flam.When analise was on her last flam she stood up furiously “ENOUGH OF THIS YOU NEED TO TAKE MORE CARE OF FIRE!!!!!”Analise yelled.Hannah dashed to try and get the flame but Analise made a ring of fire around her.Analise blew fire right at hannah.Hannah managed to dodge it,Hannah and kiwi dashed to the river and dove in.Analise threw the flame on top of the volcano Hannah saw Analise throw the flame.When Analise went back into the volcano Hannah and kiwi came out of the river and started to climb the volcano to get the fire.When Hannah got to the top of the volcano the fire wasn't there. Hannah guessed it was in the rock of the volcano so Hannah took same of the rock with her.When Hannah and kiwi arrived back at the  pa  Hannah started to rub 2 of the rocks that she got together and sparks started to appear then a fire.Every one cheered for Hannah and they never had to worry about their fire going out again.

Writing Reflection

I need to work on…
not getting distracted   

What learning muscle I used was…

What was tricky with my writing…
Was putting in vocabulary

What I would do next time…
Describe the setting more

I am most proud of…
My art

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